Wednesday 20th May 2020
L.O: To write my conclusion and edit.
Today lesson is in two parts.
First we finish writing our letter, ending with the conclusion.
Second to proof-read and edit.
Part 1: Conclusion writing
To end the letter, expressing that we must do something now and to hope to hear from them soon.
Look back at your plan to see which sentences openers and phrases you are going to be using.
For your conclusion you will need to:
To show the set out of this, I have put the model conclusion below and colour coded it to show how each point has been included. (Remember this conclusion is about a different topic, make sure you write yours about ocean threats!)
In conclusion, I hope you will take my concerns seriously and take on board some of my suggestions to solve this problem. If we don’t take action and do something about it now, then we will lose our park forever. I look forward to and await your response.
Mrs M Simpson
Ending your letter
I will be waiting for your reply...
I look forward to your response...
Part 2: Editing
Great work if you have been reading through and editing after completing each paragraph. If not, don’t worry, follow the steps below to edit your letter:
(If you can, use a different colour pen!)
Now read your letter again. If you can, read it aloud to someone else.
Tomorrow we will be writing up our letter neatly.
Please find the activity above as a pdf below.